Saturday, 7 September, 2024
I finally pre-entered UoPeople. The reason for “pre” is that I won’t be permitted to enter if I can’t meet English proficiency. Anyway, as a pre-entered student, I started my first term.
One of the most impressive things about my first two days in college is that the students who have financial difficulty and live in difficult situations in their countries have incredible passion and motivation for learning. I’m ashamed of my laziness despite living peacefully in a no-war country and being able to have enough food. I decided to commit my learning and make a great effort to improve my computer and English skills.
I’m not good at insisting on my opinion. However, as a college student, I must clarify and convey my thoughts to others. I expect that the training lead me to urge my thoughts in the business scene.
So far, I enjoy my learning. I have already finished several assignments, but I have three challenging tasks. I am eager to improve my English reading and writing skills through this course.
By the way, in my business life, I must learn many things, such as Google Cloud, new programming languages, and cloud technology. It’s more important that I use the time effectively.
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Your diary entry is well-written with only a few errors. It’s great to hear about your experiences at UoPeople and your motivation to improve your skills. Keep up the good work!
Revised Diary
Saturday, 7 September 2024
I finally pre-enrolled at UoPeople. The reason for the “pre” is that I won’t be permitted to enroll if I can’t meet the English proficiency requirement. Anyway, as a pre-enrolled student, I started my first term.
One of the most impressive things about my first two days in college is that the students who have financial difficulties and live in challenging situations in their countries have incredible passion and motivation for learning. I’m ashamed of my laziness despite living peacefully in a country without war and having enough food. I have decided to dedicate myself to learning and make a great effort to improve my computer and English skills.
I’m not good at asserting my opinions. However, as a college student, I must be able to articulate and communicate my thoughts to others. I hope that this training will help me express my ideas confidently in a business setting.
So far, I am enjoying my learning. I have already completed several assignments, but I still have three challenging tasks ahead of me. I am eager to enhance my English reading and writing skills through this course.
On another note, in my professional life, I must learn many things such as Google Cloud, new programming languages, and cloud technology. It is crucial that I use my time effectively.
Explanation of Corrections
1. “pre-entered” was changed to “pre-enrolled” for correct usage.
2. “enter” was changed to “enroll” for the correct term when joining a university.
3. “financial difficulty” was changed to “financial difficulties” to match the plural form of “difficulties.”
4. “difficult situations” was changed to “challenging situations” for a better description.
5. “commit my learning” was changed to “dedicate myself to learning” for clarity.
6. “insisting on my opinion” was changed to “asserting my opinions” for a more accurate expression.
7. “urge my thoughts” was changed to “express my ideas” for a clearer meaning.
8. “finished” was changed to “completed” for a more appropriate term.
9. “use the time effectively” was changed to “use my time effectively” to match the context. (complete)